Today we are live-blogging and and looking at your thesis statements again. Your task is divided into two stages:
1: After you log in, type your thesis statement in to the comments section, just as you did before.
2. Constructively comment on someone else's thesis statement, using only that person's display name. Try to include a positive, as well as a recommendation.
Sunday, October 23, 2011
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The main theme of the show is the easiness to control human minds by using fear and hostility towards others.
ReplyDeletePanic strikes the residents on Maple Street when they believe human-looking residents have invaded the neighborhood. This Twilight Zone episode criticizes human nature by emphasizing the fact that when things go wrong, people have the tendency to point fingers in order to release the spotlight put upon them.
ReplyDeleteCrowd mentality changes a person's behavior in making them less rational in their thinking process, and how they consider problems.
ReplyDeleteThe main theme of this show is that, in times of chaos, it is natural human behavior to blame other so attention can be drawn away from oneself.
ReplyDeleteThe statement from the aliens in "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" and the actions of the people in the group make a distressing commentary on the general state of all human nature and its mimetic tendency.
ReplyDeleteBeing in a crowd makes people change by having them put up a front so others will accept them or pass over them when weird characteristics get brought up.
ReplyDeleteWhen in the presence of a large crowd, the behaviors of individuals change, as they feel empowered, and they act more impulsively and harshly.
ReplyDeleteThe story The monsters are due on Maple street, telling a story about how a group people dis trust each other when finding the monsters in their town and ended up with hurting each other, shows that being in a crowd will make people lose their best judgement, easliy influenced by the mind and opnions by the other people's because they want to protect themselves.
ReplyDeleteThe story is fake butr it is based on the true humanity.
The more people that are added to a crowd, the more prone they are to acting on impulses.
ReplyDeleteBeing in a crowd can change the way people behave because people will turn against each other and become suspicious towards one another. They'll be influenced by whatever the group agrees about the situation instead of sharing their opinion on the situation.
ReplyDeleteBeing in a crowd can change peoples minds, to act different and blame others so the blame wont be put on them.
ReplyDeleteMob mentality can ruin the ability to distinguish between rational and totally ridiculous decisions and thoughts shown by the group gathered on Maple Street searching for a scape-goat.
ReplyDeleteMr. Thayer: I like the idea of how crowd mentality makes an individual less rational. Explore that a bit more. Just a bit cloudy on "thinking process" and "how they consider problems."
ReplyDeleteA crowd can change one's thought process in order to fit everybody else ideas so less of the attention is brought to one person.
ReplyDeletetrackstarr18-The general idea of of the statement is very good. Try citing the ideas of group psychology in your paragraph
ReplyDeleteIn the episode "The Monsters Are Due on Maple Street" it shows that when being in a crowd people change the way they behave because they accuse each other without caring if they hurt somebody innocent.
ReplyDeletesneakster: good response. the only thing is that it is only clear to those who know the prompt. someone who has no idea what the prompt is about would be confused by your response. i think all you need is to be a little more clear on which prompt you chose.
ReplyDeletetrackstarr18 -
ReplyDeleteThe idea is original and interesting, the topic of self-defense by pointing at others is introduced. However,the examples to prove the idea should be more specific and the phrasing of the thesis can be slightly revised.
In a crowd, a person's behavior is influenced through the tendency to imitate everyone else in order to avoid the blame or opposing opinions of others.
ReplyDeleteWhen people become a part of a crowd they have a tendency to conform and act as one. While the individual tend to hide their ideas and beliefs in order to keep from being targeted.
ReplyDeleteSneakster: This thesis gives good ideas and is general and straight to the point. Elaborate more, add another sentence. Also I don't think you need to mention about the show.
ReplyDeleteThis Twilight Zone episode conveys the idea that when things go wrong, being in a crowd can cause people to point fingers and act on impulse.
ReplyDeletetrackstarr18- I liked the overall idea behind your thesis of having the need to find a scape goat when anything is in disorder because no one wants to be the source of the problem or even be blamed for it. I do think the thesis could be trimmed a bit using terms and you could elaborate on what types of chaos. Perhaps confusion or frustration
ReplyDeleteSneakster: good ideas, but needs to be worded better. Ex: instead of "main theme of the show is the easiness" could be the main theme of the show is how easy it is...
ReplyDeleteTrackstarr18: I think your statement will yield a good essay because it is a profound idea that applies to any kind of chaos that humans will experience in day-to-day life, not just alien invasions. My advice would be to be careful in your full paragraph not to provide so much evidence or so many examples so as to lose your focus. If you keep the focus this will be a great paragraph.
ReplyDeleteMr.Thayer:I like the idea of how crowd mentality changes a persons behavior in making them less rational.you should probably explain a little more on how they consider problems.
ReplyDeletesneasker:This thesis highly summerized the theme of the story----when the aliens tries to control hunman beings.
ReplyDeleteImprovement: Maybe it can explain more about why it is so easy to control human minds by that method.
hk420: Great idea! First sentence isn't really part of the thesis statement but would be a great intro sentence or component of paragraph. The whole thing is worded extremely well and will be easily successfully proved in the paragraph!
ReplyDeleteQuaffleFlu: A good idea, but perhaps explain and clarify why a front is put up. The phrase 'weird characteristics' could be refined perhaps to idiosyncrasies or something along those lines.
ReplyDelete"The Monsters Are Due On Maple Street" displays the idea that when a negative change occurs in society, people tend to revert back to their natural ignorance against one another in order to deflect attention off of themselves.
ReplyDeleteQuaffleFlu- The thesis is clear and has a good idea with plenty of examples from the episode to support. You can try defining your specific ideas into the thesis.
ReplyDeleteMinority: Lots of great ideas here. I think thesis has a bit too much going on, and needs some grammatical/sentence structure work, but if you focus on one idea (ie, loss of judgment, being easily influenced), you might have something.
ReplyDeletebean352: OK, basic cause=effect thesis. Just make sure you are persuasive in your argument. Explain why more people equals more impulsivity.
Wakaflocka: Also a cause=effect thesis, but I'd like to know why, especially since the general conception of group behavior is of unity and solidarity. Why would they turn against each other?
sweetheart: Good ideas and topics. Again, why would a crowd mentality cause people to blame each other so quickly? Is it fear? Insecurity? Is it situational? Watch sentence structure.
lxplayer14: Mob mentality destroys rational thought? Why, how? Explain, using good support from program.
Balboa: Interesting. It's phrased very logistically, so I'm wondering what the ultimate point would be. Does the crowd itself cause such conformity? How? Why?
ReplyDeleteviva Mexico!: Good ideas, but I think you've inverted the cause/effect relationship. Accusing others is what happens AFTER a person's behavior is changed by a crowd. If this is your main point, explain why, how.
treehugger45: I think the bottom line of your thesis is that people are very quick to assimilate in a large group to avoid being singled out and blamed for whatever reason. Let's clear it up just a bit and perhaps add a "how."
Blue Jay: Great first sentence, second sentence is a fragment and also needs to explain main point a bit further.
phsstudent: You have a cause and 2 effects. If both, make sure there is a strong connection between the 2. If going with 1, focus and develop.
Rickyy Rozayy: You've set up situation and its effect but also have a possibly unintended theme with the phrase "natural ignorance," implying a negative human characteristic.
Blue Jay; Good general idea for a thesis statement but I'd recommend you elaborate a bit more as well as relate your thesis to the show.
ReplyDeletehk420: I like the idea, it's clear and sets up the paragraph nicely. I think the firt sentence is good but belongs in the into rather than the thesis statement.
ReplyDeleteteackstarr18 - I like the idea of blaming others to get attention off of themselves. However, word choice could be improved upon.
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